Clothing writing

The blue water gleams in the moonlight as I jump into the cool saffron surface.

As the water washes around me, the river pulls me along my nightlight swim. Sometimes she would take me down to the bottom of the river and then straight up again or stay under the water for a long long time.

After a about an hour she would get out and take me off and get changed. When she got home she would put me in a washing machine that went around and around it was my favourite time of the day!!

 In my writing I have used:
Strong verbs 
Show me,don't tell
Wow words
Goals:
Using detail
Language features 

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